I still hear the swing
Of the back and forth of your push
Feeling the breeze
Of you wearing out the floor with life
Of you sitting there
Through seasons
Now everyday is winter
And the bitter chill is killing me
Empty rocking chair now still
And in this solitude I find myself slipping
In between the contours that once held you
Embracing my frailty
I feel the sadness leaving
With every rock, your embedded presence takes a hold of me
Enchanting me with good memories
And even though tears are falling
I feel the warmth upon me
And as I lie there in my solitude
My eyes begin to feel heavy
Not with burdens but pleasure
Euphoria takes a hold of me
And now, I’m no longer in… my solitude.
first off..this is one of my favorite songs by billie... lawd knows i need some solitude... thats when im at my best.."With every rock, your embedded presence takes a hold of me
Enchanting me with good memories
And even though tears are falling
I feel the warmth upon me
And as I lie there in my solitude " i loved that part..imagery here was great.. a def fav.. nice
Now, I have to be honest with you on this one Jody. Something felt a bit disjointed with this write. The emotions were there (verbally), but I think the progression was a bit too sudden. Times like these drag on, and in this write you sortof took the reader's hand and ran them through it (literally). Still, I'm loving the concept. Nice write overall.