Nickname:Mr. RTJ Country:United States City:From the lost regions of... State:VA Gender:Male Age:23 Member Since:Apr 19, 2007 Last Login:Dec 04, 2008 Poems Submitted:215 Average Ranking: Poem Comments:2,578 Poem Views:21,935 Member Comments:852
first things first, i have to mention i don't remember seeing tears detailed as rhythmic before so that definately caught me. and the way the tear was followed throughout gave not only a tale of hurt feelings but the journey of characteristics of sorrow, the tear to not being able to fly freely in the emotion. the dept described as it could have the effect of caving in your chest or tearing of a wing leaving you handicap. just so much detail to paint to the mind. this just screamed torn emotions and the structure really gave it that "get this out my system please" type deal. great stuff.
just a vast supply of treats to the mind. the symbolism was so plentiful. the comparisons to nature that really fertilize the mind with the emotions being expelled. not to mention the message in itself. the patience. the lost practice in such a world. i must say i liked " like to be both the chased and the pursuer in this our race, I cannot lie." as that is a balance i enjoy myself. great stuff.
this was very endearing. really poured out the feelings of how someone can make you whole even if they don't see it. this really makes me think of a line, what cause is lost so long as there is one fool to fight for it. good stuff.
last line summed it all up. at the end of the day, it matters not what others say. so long as you can look at yourself and know the truth and persevere on, that's it. good stuff. really poured your heart into it.
Commented on the poem "Matilda" on 12/01/08 at 05:34 PM
not going to lie, the beginning struck me one way, but as i continued i saw the switch in thought. like a monkey on the back. like eyes peering into the back of the head. the influence that should not influence. that second guess of such, "makes me wonder why the bad is so easy to try" very deep, makes you hold on to what beliefs are held to further fight a powerful demon with sweets that end sour. good stuff.
The end is Near...
November 26, 2008 at 11:11 PM
Reflecting in the rearview of existence...
Watching time fly by hoping that is not my sole destination...
The attempts to live a life worth living...
Struggling to leave a legacy as insurance of immortality...
Existence not only then... also now... and onto forever...
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Commented on the poem "Compensation of the Psyche" on 12/04/08 at 08:25 PM
