What a forceful piece this was, filled with such loathing for these beings that taunt and pass judgement on their own senseless scales. The false judges, eh? Well said, with pride and conviction in one's own enlightenment and knowledge of right. The falsities and fallacies may allow these remorseless beings to have their way, but it will never hold up for long. As stated in this piece..
"all things shall come to pass
your vindictiveness
shall deliver you
to the hands of fate"
..what more can i say? This was written with eloquence yet carried a forceful tone, well suited to the message in this piece. Well expressed.
I have read this afew times and each time i wish to comment, i realize there isn't much to say. Not a bad thing of course, it's just that this write is so immersed in a ..depth of emotional expression, filled with sorrow and pain, that it would be a farce to interpret it in any form other than the writer's own point-of-view. So i will appreciate this for what it is, a piece that gathers the anguish and agony of a being within its words.. with an aura of such devastation, so enhanced by your words. The imagery of your written portrays such images, seeking to personify the painful feel of this write. Plus, the way you started and ended this, with 'quietus' and 'cyan droplets flooded my solitude' .. just amazing. Very well written!
Commented on the poem "Melpomene" on 12/16/08 at 11:05 AM
Isn't Melpomene such an excruciatingly beautiful character? I like the way you've captured her tragic appeal in this write. One thing that stands out in this, is how you've taken the stance of Melpomene being in a swirl of tragedy and ills herself, not just bringing solemn tidings to others. The fourth part of this write expressed that very well..
"ashen face...
tragic mask lying at her feet"
..gives such a parallel to the tragic muse's fate being tragic as well. You expressed her ethereal beauty and talents, as well as her sombre circumstance, which culminates to portray Melpomene in a classically fragile way. That was a very nice effect. Very well written!
A beautiful write, with words immersed in the magnificence of life. Does indeed bring into focus the message that for one to be at ease with life, one has to be at ease with life.. and vice versa. I like the transition that took place through this write- from the unveiling of the facade, to the declaration of what living should be and finally the hope and want to experience life in its entirety. There is a subtle feel of excitement that runs through your words in this.. understated and perfectly suited for this piece, tying in with the theme of moving past the past- with anticipation, into a new experience of life. A lovely write, Raw.
Commented on the poem "Verbal Warfare" on 12/11/08 at 09:08 PM
Goodness, this was verbal warfare indeed! You stayed true to the title and the tone of this took on a 'battle' type feel, forceful and filled with rage and disdain. That, in turn, increases the effect of this piece for the reader.. drawing them into the unforgiving tint of your words. Through your own words in this write, you have put across the extent of power words have when used a certain way and how they can seem to hurt, agonize and.. 'reduce' another. Well written, Afroditee!
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Commented on the poem "Sentenced to Death" on 12/17/08 at 02:36 AM
