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"lost in hell..."
  by ShanKranK


as i lay to fall asleep
and think my final thoughts
my eyes are becoming weak
the day will soon be forgot
i dream of rotting corpses
and see images of hell
and feel the sensation of evil forces
and hear a females yell
i cant cant believe i'm dreaming
at all feels so alive
i can feel the fire steaming
i feel i wont survive
as lose stature and decide to crawl
the ground beneath is devoured
and i'm hurdled into an eternal fall
i have been falling for months..days...an hour?
there is no time, there is no space
when you're lost in hell
its the end of the human race
i hit the ground and land in blood
limbs, skulls, organs, galore..
i look behind and see a familiar disfigured face
i know this, it is my mothers
i look some more...i find my brothers
i cannot take this hell any more
all this blood, all this gore
i cant stand the heat
i cant stand the smell
everything is discreet
when you're lost in hell
i struggle to wake
i toss and turn
this must be fake
though i still feel the burn
i try again and to my desire
my eyes open...im away from the eternal fire
i find my mother, fine and alive
i see my brother, im glad he survived
was it real, was it surreal?
on this i can't dwell
because everything's unreal
when you're lost in hell
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Date Submitted: Dec 05, 2008 (02:53 AM)
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  big josh
12/14/08 (05:49 PM) 
yo dis was really deep and alot of meaning , 10 stars

  da cipher
12/05/08 (04:38 PM) 
I think you are learning this and I think you told a bleak story. I would just check my grammar a little bit more and rethink my word choices. “as lose my sature and have to crawl”, doesn’t make sense.

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