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"Jacen"
  by LiquidFire
  - This Poem is a response to the poem For My Children by Jody


So full of energy
Bursting with life
You are the greatest poem
Spawned into life

Weaved intricately
Designed to be
The love of my life
And the man of my heart

Daily I see
Your resemblance of me
But I know
Tinkering in that head of yours

Is the greatest story
Untold
Action and adventure
Sword fighting

And cars that go fast
Enemies falling to your left
And the right
Staring them all down

Unwavering strength
And determination
Just in the stories you tell
I know that you're a fighter

Every bit of me that's not
There will be no turquoise clouds
And purple skies for you
I see now

You play in the true colors of life
I love you for who you are
Every bit of it that's not me
Stay individually true baby boy

And undoubtedly you will go far
Keep dreaming
Keep moving
Keep living

Not everyone will understand
The whole that is you
But for the few who do
Bloom into the fullness of life

For them and they will pull up all the weeds
And toss away pebbles from the fertile soil
Of your heart
Keep you watered

And full of sunshine laughter
Even when I'm gone
Take these words of mine and add to them
Make them your own

You are the greatest poem

Spawned into life
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Date Submitted: Oct 28, 2008 (03:44 AM)
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  Lyricsista
12/06/08 (02:22 PM) 
wow ur ability to paint vivid pictures using so few words is astounding! astounding! plzz keep doin ya thang, cuz i really need u to fa real!

  DorianGrey
11/20/08 (03:57 PM) 
WoW...I've def been sleepin on my bff in ATL...you're quite the wordsmith! I luv'd the imagery and fluid movement. The first 5 stanzas really put the reader in Jacen's world and then we see him as you see him with all the motherly luv...this was beautiful. *D*

  Tpoet
10/28/08 (07:12 PM) 
beautiful dedication to your son

  Blakfiya
10/28/08 (12:29 PM) 
;)...awww. Hi, Jacen! This was beautiful.

  piss a mofo of...
10/28/08 (10:05 AM) 
there is no greater love than that between a parent and a child(ren)..it is that enjoyment of watching them live and grow...absolutely beautiful!

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