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"Color Me Careless"
by DorianGrey

Red
bright like first-blood
falling,
reaching,
careening toward that empty vessel

A shell with a shelf life
so few fat moons before
I.....go bad
So many minutes of fresh-
ness before I get...
stale,
overly chewy,
unpleasant,
and airy.

Blue, black and green
thrashed against threadbare parchment
color me careless...
an abstract dream.

*D*

Date Submitted: Oct 07, 2008 (09:11 AM)

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11/30/08 (05:02 PM)

the wordplay in this was on point! It was the title of this poem that caught me so and pulled me in. I was curious as to where you would take this title and I likes the results. I agree with Scriptixz...this did come off very nonchalant and I think that's what I like about this poem the most. Color me as you please...it means not much to me. there is no inspiration and therefore the interests in not there. very nicely expressed.

Scriptz

11/18/08 (08:34 PM)

my dear, this is phenomenal poetry! i had to read it twice just to sink that much further and like many i guess my flaw as a reader is i try to decipher, to...pick it apart and not just live in it and relate how i should. I got an entirely different feeling from Jamillah's one...this came across very...nonchalant...dispassionate and i can definitely relate to that! I confess i have been without inspiration for a good few weeks now, make that several or even months and so my world is pretty munda...
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Jamillah

11/12/08 (11:49 AM)

I'm really distracted right now.. i wish i were in a quiet place so I can really get into this the way I'd like, but I'm glad I chose this one to read... definitely feelin the self-acceptance.. the choosing to and even desiring to be abstract.. to be indescribable.. undefinable.. that's what its about.. bein the dopest YOU.

Tpoet

10/21/08 (09:48 AM)

very nice I likes a lot

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