hit em hard
hit-hit em where it hurts
where pain lurks
sore all over
like you been put through major work
beam him up scotty
like captain kurk
lasers phased you
and ripped ya shirt
gashed ya legs and shoulders
now you on full alert
body throbbing
but mainly
ya heart hurt
like its been pierced
and ya watchin ya blood splirt
blood squirt
gues i had blood thirst
consistantly poking you
like i was a blood flirt
and now ya mad cause i
struck blood first
now you spitting out blood words
blood curse blood bath pull out the blood hurse
blood buck blood jerk, choked up from the blood clutch
blood must continue to circulate
or else you blood fucked
"watchin ya blood splirt blood squirt guess i had blood thirst" I love this part and it kinda brought a smile to my face.lol..i love this piece though you get a 10 from me
felt the deep emotions..and it came out fucking hott as hell in that crazy way but the images..damn they were harshed up yet vivid always good though.. your poems are extremely well written from first line to last