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"AS THE SMOKE RAISE"
  by grim


I SIT WITH MY FRIENDS..
AND JUST BLOW A L AND AS THE SMOKE RASIE'S FROM THE TIP...
I THINK TO MY SELF LIKE WHAT HAVE WE BECOME..
WE ALL THINK ALIKE AND DO THE SAME THING...
BUT I JUST WONT'A BE ME..
SO I PUFF ON THE L THINKIN ITS GONE SET ME FREE...
BUT I SEE THE SMOKE AND ITS RAISING SLOWLY..
AS IT BEGINS TO GROW...
I BEGIN TO SHOW MY TRUE COLORS..
HATE,LOVE,PEOPLE JUDGE ME AS A THUG...
THE SMOKE BEGINGS TO RAISE FASTER
TIME IS GETTING SHORTTER...
MY HEAD BEGINGS TO SPEND...
BUT WAIT ITS TO LATE...
MY LIFE IS OUT OF ORDER..
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Date Submitted: Aug 20, 2008 (04:23 AM)
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comment icon  COMMENTS (7)
  tamara843chuck...
08/23/08 (06:04 PM) 
this is a dope right....im diggin dis 10 starz

  mz_April
08/22/08 (10:48 PM) 
im diggin this it coulda been longer though ya know and tell sum more about that u was feelin. but good =]

  Snickaz
08/21/08 (01:14 AM) 
wow. this was kinda deep there. i liked how you realized wat ur life looked like. i personally hate smokin...it makes it REAL hard for me to breathe, but in this you make it kind of appealing to just sit bacc, try it out, and hopefully feel better...

  daidai_dts4l
08/21/08 (12:34 AM) 
iight im feelin it...keep writen my dude

  unique1luv
08/21/08 (12:06 AM) 
I'm diggin this write 4real but u coulda done more wit this write pa.but mos def gon give u love on this one.keep it lyrical

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